Friday, September 19, 2014

rough draft for Thompson essay (part 3)

Analytical Response to Thompson’s “Public Thinking”
            Clive Thompson, author of “Public Thinking” has been a long time writer for the New York Times newspaper, and rightfully so. His diction exemplifies tremendous passion in his writing. One of his most famous works in which he demonstrates this is “Public Thinking”. Interestingly enough, in his earlier years, Thompson viewed the Internet and social media as an increasing downfall of society. To his surprise, he began to see only good coming from this launch into a new technological era. People were writing in large amounts like no one has ever seen before, not to mention the quality of writing due to “the audience effect” had also taken a turn for the best. These are just two of the positive attributes Thompson sees in online writing. His purpose for writing this essay is to demonstrate to the public a number of ways that writing online is actually increasing our literacy. He expresses himself so deeply, due to the fact that this topic is very controversial and people usually tend to lean more toward technology and online writing becoming a detrimental thing to our society. Thompson uses a number of evidence to inform the reader every reason as to why this is a common misconception. In my analytical response to Thompson’s text, I will examine the different techniques he uses in his evidence to show just how effectively he explains and executes every piece of evidence he provides the reader.
Although Americans today tend to believe that the increasing use of the internet and other forms of technology has a negative effect on society as a whole, there are 3 main forms of evidence that are properly executed in order to support Thompson’s case that Americans are in fact, wrong. An experimental study done by professor Brenna Clarke Gray illustrates the audience affect on her students by assigning them to create a Wikipedia entry on Canadian writers. After her study, Gray shared that her students did significantly better on this assignment than the others, primarily due to the fact that they took it more seriously. She states, “It was like night and day” (56).  She uses night and day as opposites in order to show her pathos to her study and to instill within the reader just how successful and persuasive this study was. The fact that the idea of online prose is such an abundant way of writing to one’s highest potential as to use it in an academic study goes to show that this discovery is far from myth. However, to every study is a little error. In the case of this example, it would have benefitted the reader vastly if this analysis were to have been replicated on individuals in the middle school age to see if maturity has a factor on the results.  
            In addition to this study, Thompson uses an incidence in history to support the idea that the way we think is a product of our environment. “If four astronomers discovered sunspots at the same time, it’s partly because of the quality of lenses in telescopes in 1611 had matured to the point where it was finally possible to pick out small details on the sun and partly because the question of the sun’s role in the universe had become newly interesting in the wake of Copernicus’s heliocentric theory” (Thompson 59). This directly ties into present-day Americans and the development of the Internet as a place where we can freely express ourselves through our individual and original writing. If the people who surround us are writing more due to the accessibility and convenience of the Internet, we will follow the crowd due to our human nature of being “pack animals”. The increase in popularity also leads to more competition such as: “Who always has a really well-written Facebook status” or even, “Who has the cleverest captions to their pictures on Instagram?” These rhetorical questions are just two examples in which Americans have found themselves to ask while surfing through social media sites and directly correlates to the increase in human cognition. This is evident in human nature to always be “on top” or have a competitive “alpha” mentality. This claim of Thompson’s is quite effective as he brings a new element into his evidence by adding an example from history. He proves that this is the way human behavior has worked for centuries and there is no reason why now is the time when that comes to an end.
            One of Thompson’s concluding points includes a personal anecdote on Ernest Duchesne and his original discovery of penicillin. Due to the fact that Duchesne was young and not very well known, his writings of the discovery weren’t noticed. It took 47 years, and millions of people dead from diseases, for its rediscovery by Scottish scientist Alexander Fleming to finally be accepted by the public. “Failed networks kill ideas” (Thompson 61). This was the perfect thing for Thompson to say in his work because it truly adds another element of pathos. Pathos is an important component in successful writing today because the reader is given the opportunity to understand in more of a personal manner. This writing technique is becoming more popular because Americans are starting to realize what grabs the reader’s attention and allows for the author to be easily noticed. If Duchesne and Fleming were to have the same connections we do today, millions of innocent lives could have been saved.
To wrap it all up, it is clear that Thompson was able to connect to the reader through his various writing styles and types of evidence. I have portrayed in this paper, his exemplary use of just 3 of his main claims: an account in history, experimental study, and lastly a personal anecdote. His argument is very relevant which is another main reason why so many people are interested in what he has to say. It has been a common misconception in the past that technology was actually the antagonist of developing society and used as a crutch for people’s lazy writing. But through his writing, people began to listen, for what he had to say instilled a new thought in the minds of people whom technology greatly affects. The Internet “encourages public thinking and resolves multiples on a much larger scale and at a pace more dementedly rapid” (Thompson 61).



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